Secret Pocket
Her good friend, surely she could be trusted. “I won’t tell a soul,” she’d said crossing her heart.
It was in the whispers, the pin drop silence around the water cooler.
Lesson learned, Kate thought, who the fuck still crosses her heart?
Yeah, who does that, anymore? Oh yeah, someone who doesn’t plan to stay quiet. Great one!
Thank you!
Yup, I’ve been there! Some friends are not to be trusted with sensitive information.
You set up the distrust for me perfectly. So when you addressed her suspicious action it really grabbed me! Nice work!
Oh- I just loved this! Your words said it all, but the look on that girls face is perfect. (I’m going to remember that last line and hope I get a chance to use it someday.)
Great punch at the end. I also really liked the way you phrased “pin drop silence.” Very cool description.
I’ve been there. Ugh. Loved the water cooler silence.
Pin-drop silence, oh yeah. That gnarly last line got me. *pained laughter*
The picture you chose goes perfectly with that last line. I could see it written all over her face!
The ending here is perfect! Haven’t we all been sucked into believing we could trust someone? Ouch!
Oh, we certainly have. Thank you!
hahaha i’m sorry but i just loved the ending… i was reading thinking “odd picture for school kids crossing their heart” and then bam. 😀
Thank you!
Who indeed! I loved your take on the prompt.
Thank you!
Damn, I’ve been there. Love the pic, too!
Hahaha. Thank you!
Good point! Love it and the picture!
Thank you. Me too. I love that the water is running and she has just the look I was going for. 🙂
I can ‘see’ these two women in the pinpoint-perfect lines you’ve written. Excellent.
I’m so glad. Thank you!